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January 8, 2012

“I Don’t Get Nervous.”

by limebirdkate

Okay, so there I am, having finished reading my 5 pages out loud to my writer’s group and Liz, the non-cookie-baking grandmother, looked at me over the rims of her specs.

“I don’t understand this,” she told me, referring to a sentence in the manuscript. “‘Swooping, sharp pains in her stomach’.” Liz spread her arms out and shook her head. “What does that mean?”

I replied, “It means she’s nervous.”

“So, why don’t you just write ‘she’s nervous’?”

“Because I wanted to show it, not tell it.”

Liz just stared at me. She might have blinked once, but I couldn’t be sure.

I tried to explain further. “You know, how it feels when you get nervous? Your stomach gets all tight or loopy…”

Liz said, “I don’t get nervous.”

Now it was my turn to be speechless. She doesn’t get nervous? What kind of person doesn’t get nervous?

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