100 Word Stories – Legacy

by limebirdwriters

Merry Friday everyone! The Limebirds take part in the 100 word story challenges set by Julia’s Place   every week and this week the prompt is ‘Legacy’. You don’t have to include the prompt words this week, but you have to create a 100 word story from it.  If you would like to have a go, scroll down to the bottom for more information.

100 word challenge

This week we have myself and Limebirds Kate and Vanessa taking part.

LimebirdBeth

Dear Diary,

I think that this will be the last entry that I’ll make to you. Mum, Dad and the docs just left my room and all Mum did was cry. I’m can’t believe I never got to do all of the things I talked to you about but I’m so tired. I remember in school last year Miss White talked about our legacy and the footprint we were going to leave on the world, but what have I done? Well, that’s it I think. Thanks for listening to me.

Jenny Thomas, aged 11 3/4

LimebirdKate

LEGACY – A CHARACTER SKETCH

Wide eyes, brown like the water outside his home.

A faded map depicting the route where his father died

His mother’s stories about the tribal cause

White men who stole his sister

Disease and death running rampant in his land

A leaky canoe

A three-legged dog who could sniff out wild turkeys and the enemy

Tattoos red and black

A velvet pouch not to be opened unless faced with death

A gun with four bullets, a bowie knife he kept cutting himself with

He’s chosen not because he’s the one, but because he’s the last one left

LimebirdVanessa

Dawn broke. Humala surveyed the scene around him. His people had done well. The red dust that had been stirred up by the landing still hung in the air, apparently motionless. All eyes were on him. He knew that whatever words he spoke now would be marked in history for time eternal. He breathed in and raised himself tall. “My people”, he began. “Yesterday we thought it was the end. Today we know it is just the beginning. Our planet may have died, but we have not. This new planet shall be named ‘Espoir’ meaning ‘hope’. This is our legacy”.

Would you like to have a go at a 100 word story? Well, head on over to Julia’s Place for the rules and either add your offering in the comments, or do your own post, but don’t forget to either link back to us or let us know in the comments so we can come and read!

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16 Comments to “100 Word Stories – Legacy”

  1. I suppose the prompt is bound to lead to thoughtful and perhaps more melancholy interpretations.

    Beth—so sad a tale but so much said.
    Kate—wonderful imagery of a sad part of history
    Vanessa—thank you for a somewhat hopeful ending to one of the tales!

  2. And, you’re back! 🙂 Fine offerings all ’round.

    Beth, I don’t often enjoy first person, but the epistolary format works well, for this. Especially touching is that last line, the author noting her age. We see that a lot on papers at school, though rarely stop to think about what it can mean. At least Jenny has the chance to say goodbye.

    Kate, you always manage to convey such intense emotion in these freer pieces. Every line is full of melancholy, but that last one gives me shudders.

    Vanessa, I love what you’ve done with such simple sentences. (Dawn broke. What a great start; evocative of the whole piece, really!) Great to see a sliver of hope come forth for this last entry, too.

    Good to see none of you have lost your touches! 🙂

  3. Great job limebirds.

    Beth–great voice. I think you really captured the emotions of a young child who is prepared for death. I, too, love that you had her write her age so precisely–typical of a child.

    Vanessa–this would make a wonderful opening to a story, getting us right into a pivotal moment. Humala is a great protag, immediately coming across as strong but fully aware of the obstacles facing him.

  4. Beth – Very emotional, I could hardly bear to read it!

    Kate – Really powerful and full of colour.

  5. Smart, well-written entries, all, (but then I expect no less from Limebird.) I love all of them, and each in its own way is so powerful. Beth, I prefer yours, but only by a whisper over the others, Great job, All!

  6. Y’all are awesome… but you knew that already 😉

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